Francesca Bregazzi
The Advanced Portfolio Evaluation.



1. In what ways does your media product use, develop or challenge forms and conventions of real media products?

“A movie isn’t a political movement, a party or even an article. It’s just a film. At best it can add its voice to public outrage.”- Ken Loach
Ken Loach was born on the 17th of June 1936. A British born film director Loach tackled the view of realism. His talent to make films which sometimes appear so real that it comes across unscripted allows the audience to connect with the film. Not only does Loach try and show the actors at there most natural but he emphasises the genuine connection between each character in scenes. Other Famous socialist directors would be Mike Leigh and also Andrea Arnold.

I researched Ken Loach and found a review on his work. Looking for Eric (2009)
http://www.uncut.co.uk/film/ken_loach/reviews/13162


The Advanced Portfolio Evaluation.


Another British born film director is Mike Leigh, having been trained at the Royal Academy of Dramatic Art Leigh was well on his way to success and breaking into becoming and award winning screen writer. Social realism being his passion, Leigh is able to show this to the audience in such away it comes across with little effort. Although Leigh has been accused of sometimes belittling his characters and making them come across inadequate they are just ordinary people that are not necessarily seen as ‘film stars’
I have found an interview with Mike Leigh in which he talks about his take making his films and how he likes to produce his work.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xGYh_re8C6I
Explaining how he likes to make his actors improvised when filming, we are able to understand how Leigh likes to work.






• Before starting our short film project we studied Brief Encounter which allowed us to view social realism many years ago.
• David Lean the director of Brief Encounter used the idea of social realism to its fullest although in this day and age it is seen as quite a simple story, adultery not being seen as a big subject today. The story could be a metaphor to what women had done during World War 2. Having to take the males place in the work area when they where fighting for our country, having a sense of freedom and then being unable to continue leading that style of living. Women were seen as the weaker sex in that time and unable to have any sort of life as they relied on there husbands to provide for the family home, we see Laura gain a sense of freedom in the film when she allows herself to have an affair with a man she hardly knows. Lean lets the audience see how women feel about being seen as inferior to men in general lifestyle
• The film shared the 1946 Palme d’Or at the Cannes Film Festival and in 2004 Total Film named it the 44th Greatest British film of all time.




Brief Encounter Review
http://www.bbc.co.uk/films/2006/02/06/brief_encounter_2006_review.shtml

• Before starting our project our group decided to brainstorm the different area which we could base our short film around. As we had studied Social Realism in class we thought this would be the most sensible area to go into.
• Although we had not decided on a strict storyline we started by choosing a social realism topic. Bullying was the area we chose to look into. Also before shooting we spoke about the way in which we could show our films genre was social realism. Discussing areas such as clothing, locations, casting, makeup and also camera work as well and lighting.
• As we began to decided and gain more of an understanding of what our film would be about the idea of bullying would be very hard to come across realistic and true. So we decided to broaden the storyline and show a young boys life and what many young teenagers face in there daily routine.
• Jimmy (the main character) had to come across as being a loner with many issues in his life. We tried to show this by focusing on costume; trainers were brought by a member of the group and were worn to make him look unfashionable and geeky.
• Location was one of the most important areas that we hade to make look working class and realistic to the audience. Before filming each person in the group researched different areas which we could film in. I photographed locations that I think would work well, I received good feedback from my teacher though we was unable to use that specific area as each person in the group had trouble arriving in each town, as all of use live is different areas. We decided to film most of the footage in Haywards Heath town as it was the most suitable.
• We decided to use a monologue in the film; we wanted the character to have an effect on the audience and for them to feel as if they knew Jimmy.
• The camera work was a big part of our project as the character had little interaction with anyone we had to show Jimmy in different areas using different camera angles and camera shots. We used a lot of extreme long angles to show his surroundings that the character was in. I think this worked well although the camera work was simple it allowed the audience to concentrate on the monologue and they were able to understand what Jimmy’s life was like being an outsider and alone for much of his life.
• As the storyline was quite simple we also decided to combine the idea of social realism with romance. Adding to the storyline that Jimmy had a crush on a young girl at his school I think this allowed the audience to see a more emotional, loving side to the character.


2. How effective is the Combination of your main product and your ancillary tasks?

• Throughout making our project we knew that after finishing the film we had to design a poster that would work well and promote the film to the best of its ability.
• I decided to research Mike Leigh and also Andrea Arnold as we had decided to make a social realism film I felt that these directors would be very helpful.

• In 2009 Andrea Arnold won a British Independent Film Award for best director for Fish Tank. Being brought up on a council estate herself Arnold was able to portray a very realistic view of what life can be like for many young teenagers.
A simple story of a young girl aged 15 with her daily struggles in her life, based in Essex Arnold shows Mia (the main character) in a society that is surrounded by class and gender. As an audience we are able to see what the young teen has to go through in the environment that she has been brought up in, from fighting with her mum to general relationship struggles.
The poster of this film was a very important factor, having to gain the audiences attention and make us feel as if we could relate to what the film may be about. I think the target audience would be 13-18 years of age, in my opinion I think that the poster does interest its audience; although it does not give much away I think we are curious about what it entails. Though I do think that the poster could be improved slightly, as a social realism film the poster appears airbrushed and there is a lot of colour used this being the opposite of what we would expect from the genre of film. I feel that the title works very well for the poster as it may be a metaphor to what the young girl may be feeling, as if she is a big fish in a small place relating to her environment and feelings.





• All three people in our group chose to make an individual draft of a post that each of up thought would work well. After doing this we all decided on the poster that I had designed. A photograph of the right side of Jimmy’s face with a plain background showing the audience the bruising of his face. Using Photoshop I edited the poster and added text.
• This was the final poster that I designed, although the poster was effective and the bruising looked very realistic, after receiving feedback the poster had confused people. The general feedback was that people did not understand why there was bruising on the side of his face, as we had change the storyline slightly when making the film the idea of bullying what not the main idea.
• Therefore we decided to change the poster and go for a slightly different effect. Using a low angle from his shoulders to the top of his thigh the photograph allows the audience to see he is carrying his doll without giving too much away. The text is also quite simple which fits in well with the storyline.
• The tagline ‘one small friend, one large friendship’ gives a clue into what the film may be about without explaining too much, which lets the audience question what the film could be about and make them want to watch.
• When deciding which colour to use for the background we wanted it to be quite simple as the photograph of the main character had to stand out, a light grey colour was chosen to also give some indication to the audience about what his life may be like. Also as the doll is a big part of the film we wanted to draw attention to this, creating a simple title, tagline and little writing included, I think this helped the doll to become a main object of the poster.
• As a whole I think that the poster works very well, although it is quite simple I think together with the framing, title and straightforward text it fits well with our film. Making the audience question what the film may be about was the main thing that we hoped to achieve. Therefore I think we have created a poster that complements the film very well.


3. What have you learned from your audience feedback?


• Before producing our film we discussed possible ages that we could target our product at. After talking about different ages we came to the decision of the age 12-18 as I think that this age group would be able to relate to the storyline.
• We started a group on a social networking site to try and find area of our film that we could improve on or change, we had a lot of good feedback about our film; many people said they liked the fact that there was a voice over as it allowed them to understand what the character was feeling and showed his emotions very well.
Here are a few things that people enjoyed about our short film
• Music- from the feedback we found that people thought that the music worked well as it gave the audience an insight into his loneliness
• Variety of angles- we tried to show different angle throughout our film to make it more interesting, this helped as some of the audience said it kept them entertained.
• I feel that the storyline was one of thee biggest things that people liked, as there was a sense of mystery the audience felt as if they wanted to carry on watching.

We also received some helpful critique about the film, this was very useful as it let us know what we could improve on if we ever done it again.

• As there was a monologue over the film we had quiet music in background, although the film was very short some people found the music repetitive.

• As we had been given a slightly broken tripod we some parts of the film look slightly awkward, not being able to make the camera move smoothly when filming was a major interference in our work. And some of the audience picked up on this.

• The lack of interaction with anyone was a big area which many thought we could improve on although it was meant to show his daily life I think that if the main character was to have spoken to someone it could have made the film more interesting.


4. How did you use media technologies in the construction, and research, planning and evaluation stages?


• One of the main things I think I have improved on this year is camera work, before shooting I made a detailed storyboard with shots that would be included in our film I think this was a big help to the group as it allowed us to keep organised and allowed us to not waste time. The storyboard being a big help let us see stage by stage what camera work had to be done, as I was in a smaller group this year I found that I was able to have more input into producing our film and was able to share opinions as to which camera angle/shot would look good. Though there were certain areas of the camera work that may be improved on such as the white balance for example, we had not set this which made our film look slightly yellow in some areas though it is an easy mistake to make I think that the film would work much better if this was not the case.
• The blog was another area that I thought worked very well in our group, I found it much easier and a lot more helpful to use compared to last year, the fact that we could gain feedback from our teachers was a big help out to the group. Also we were able to upload photographs, video clips and also link to websites I think this made our blog a lot more inviting and nicer to read.

Lisa Dunham: Final Evaluation

1. In what ways does your media product use, develop or challenge forms and conventions of real media products?

• Social Realism is a typical British genre. It is a form of fictional realism, which aims to represent the lives of ordinary people in ways that appear very 'true to life'. Some famous socialist directors include Mike Leigh, who directed Happy Go Lucky, Andrea Arnold, who directed Fish Tank and Ken Loach, who directed Kes. The directors aim to represent the lives of ordinary people, either using stereotypes or well rounded characters. The issues they use are usually about the working class and may challenge dominant ideologies such as Feminism.


• http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xGYh_re8C6I=xGYh_re8C6I This video shows an interview with Mike Leigh. He talks about how he uses improvisation within his actors and how he works with them. He says that he builds up the characters by using the actors and thinks about juxtaposition when he is creating his films.


• Some directors may also use positive representations of minority groups to make them more visible and understood, for example homosexuality.


• One of the first social realist directors was David Lean. His most famous British film is Brief Encounter. http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0037558/ (This is the IMDB page on Brief Encounter). The world created by Lean shows a perfect, carefree Britain with morals and standards. The film represents a mother who is trapped in a mundane life. To try and change this she has an affair with a Doctor.



• Her relationship with her husband can be seen as a metaphor for what was happening at the time, as it was set before World War II. The fact that she is trying to escape from her married life shows her response to oppression and the fact that she is inhibited by the ideologies of her period.


• This film represents women of that era who struggled to have excitement in their married lives.


• As this is a full length film it is harder to compare to the short social realist films we are using as research. However, one of the short films i have researched is Eight (Stephen Daldry). This film represents a small minority of children whose parent/s have died. It appeals to a lot of people as it pulls at heart strings. It is hard to relate to for a lot of people but you can feel sorry for the little boy.


• The narrative begins with the little boy, Johnathon, revealing his age and who he is. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=P4p2Y8qx-bk Its only a small part of his life that he shares with the audience. He then makes up jobs that his Dad did and it is not until the end of the film, when you feel you have become closer to the character, that he reveals that his Dad died in a football match.


• I think that we followed the same narrative structure as Eight. It followed Todorovs narrative structure of the set up, which is followed by the disruption and is then solved by the resolution. It began with him revealing part of his life and as the narrative went on, the story became much deeper and the audience feel like they know a lot more about the character. There isn't a climax or a gripping point in our film, but the shot where he reveals the doll makes the audience wonder who he really is.
  
• Todorovs structure can be applied to our short film as the set up is the shot with the bruise. The monologue then begins and tells us a little bit about his life. His crush is revealed and you can see how much he likes her, this would be the disruption as he cant be with her. The resolution is when we see the doll and you can see how much it means to him.


• We chose to represent a minority group but at the same time, a well known topic of bullying. However, as we began to film, we realised that it wasnt following a bullying storyline as he didnt really get picked on. This could be why the audience found it hard to connect, as our narrative became slightly unknown.


• We tried to make the costume look like what a poor, teenage boy would wear. He had unfashionable trainers which had been regularly worn and a Nike hoody. The hoody represents a part of the character that had tried to fit inbut it didnt work.


• We also used a typical social realist location of a housing estate. As many social realist films try to show the 'real world', we decided that a block of flats would work well for our character. The kitchen was very working class although it was hard to shoot as it had inappropriate props, such as an industrial water heater. This was very difficult to cut out but we used shots that disguised it well.




• The characters make-up was very natural and the bruise looked real. This added to the social realist feel as in the short film 'Wasp' (Andrea Arnold), the hair and make up was very natural and fits the role of the characters.


• The monologue was non diegetic sound because there was only one character in it. We took the idea from the film Eight as we thought that it was an effective social realist technique. It made the audience listen more and it gives the audience a sense of the characters life without seeing it. We used a non diegetic backing track to complement the monologue and the tone of the film.
  
• As our character is very distant from society, we used long and
  mid shots to show this. One of the close ups we used was when he was spinning the doll. When we were filming our rushes, we used a lot of lengthy, zoomed in shots. However, when we were editing, we realised that the shots were really boring and would take away the audiences concentration. We then cut the shots to make them choppier and we cut out the zooms. This, in turn, made our film look more social realist.
  
  

2. How effective is the combination of your main product and ancilliary tasks?

The Poster

• Film distributors such as Warner and Momentum Pictures - who distriubted Happy Go Lucky. Film distribution is the highly competitive business of launching and sustaining films in the market. Distributors develop a release strategy and takes the delivery of a master print of the final film.
  
• They have to think about who/what/where/when is it going to be advertised. They then decide strategies to motivate audiences awarness/interest film by film. They then think of the methods to do this such as a poster or reviews and interviews.
  
• The poster should distill the appeal of the film by the themes it uses, the credits and the tagline. The poster should tell the audience what genre it is and what the demographic is.
  










• I think that the poster works really. It looks very social realist and portrays some of the characters life. The fact that the main character is a teenager and is the subject of the poster tells the audience who it is aimed at.


• It also reveals some of the storyline because he is pictured with the doll. This creates an enigma code for the audience as they wonder what the connection is between the main character and the doll. The tagline 'One small friend, one large friendship' also makes a connection to the doll. The way that the doll is shown in the film draws the audience in as they wait to see what the relationship is and why he is alone.
  
• The grey background reflects the main characters anonymity from the rest of society. It confirms to the audience that he doesnt really do anything in his life as the background isnt a picture of him with lots of other people. We could have a picture of him in a park but this would mean that he had a social life, which retracts from the original meaning of the film.
  
• The quotes also reveal different aspects of the film and the production. We decided to do this so that the quotes arent all biased towards the film and reveal a small part towards the making of the film. They also connect with the target audience as they should be sources that they would read or be familiar with.


• The framing of the main character relates to the title and the tagline. The fact that his head is out of shot, relates to the 'Anonymous' title. The audience may wonder what he looks like or why he isnt showing her face.
  
• However, i feel that the framing works well with the rest of the film. The fact that all of the doll is in the shot shows us that she has a part in his life. The way he is holding her shows affection and that he wants to be with her. In the film he uses her as a replacement for the crush he cant have. I feel that this picture tells the audience that the toy is more than just a doll to him.


• The repition of the word 'one'in the tagline, emphasises the fact that he is alone. This adds to the narrative of the film.
  

The Review

• A film review is another example of a marketing plan. The reviewers are given a press pack by the distributors which has background information, photos and information about the actors inside.
  
• The film magazine 'in house' journalist will then produce copy for the magazine. There are consideration that effect the writing of the copy such as:
  
• Loyalities to bigger brands
• the use of language and whether it fits the context
• whether the audience of the magazine will enjoy the film
  
• We had to create a film review for Little White Lies magazine http://www.littlewhitelies.co.uk/, which is an independant specialist film magazine. It is released every two months, uses graffiti or hand drawn images for the cover and reviews all genres.
  
  
• The entire magazine is inspired by the cover of the film, with each page relating to the lead actor. It uses editorial icons, chapter headings and custom typefaces to make it more unique.
  
• The style of the magazine is the same in each issue. It has to have:


• 4 columns
• 3 point rating system of Anticipation, Enjoyment and In Retrospect. This sums up the reviews and is given a score out of 5 on each comment.
• The first line begins with the name of the actor/director and is in bold
  
• Although i was absent for the making of the review, i helped to alter the text and to make slight alterations. I found this very difficult as the lexis used has to be very field specific and very challenging as the article is for an older reader.
  
• It was hard to substitute some words for another phrase as it had to be in the right context.
  
• Overall, i feel that the article was the best that we could have produced, with the time that we had and we the range of vocabulary that we were using.
  

3. What have you learned from your audience feedback?

• The target demographic for our film is 12-18. Wehave set it at this because we feel that our film has a storyline that will effect that age group. I think that our audience understood our film but found certain scenes slightly confusing, not because of the demographic but because we didnt make the connections to some of the shots.
  
  
• A lot of audience commented on the running scene at the beggining. They didnt understand why it had happened. "The scene at the beginning where the boy was running. What was that about?" This tells me that there wasnt a clear connection between the bruise and the running. If we showed a group of people shouting his name it would have made it a lot clearer.
  
  
• If i could change this now, i would have organised the filming stage better. Although we held open auditions for the main character, we did not audition for a gang of people. This would have been wise, but we didnt get a lot of interest in the audition for the main character, so it might have been a waste of time. I think that we should have got a group of friends together to film that scene. It would have made the film make more sense and create some enigma.


• Some commented on the music, saying that it was too repetitive. We chose this music to symbolise his boring, mundaine lifestyle and i feel that we did that well. However, someone said that we should have played happier music when he was playing with the doll. It would have made more sense if we did that because when he is with the doll he is happy.


• However, a lot of people commented on the voiceover saying that it was good. This tells us that by not using our actors voice worked in our favour. I think the person that we chose, fitted the voice we were trying to achieve, but it also matched the actor.


• We didnt use any foley sound effects as they weren't needed. However, watching the film back, i feel that we could have used heavy breathing or footsteps when he is running, as i dont think it works well. However, looking back at the audience feedback, they didnt have any complaints and some even said that the silence kept them on the edge of there seats.
  

4. How did you use new media technologies in the construction, and research. planning and evaluation stages?

• The main new technology i used more than last year is the blog. I was more familiar with it this time which helped me to upload pictures and save my work more easily. It was also helpful to see comments from the teacher as it was clear what part you needed to change and to see what there views were on different stages of production.



• This year, we made use of social networking sites. We found it easier to communicate with our target audience as we could upload the film and see the comments. This worked out to be easier then having a group viewing session, as people might not have turned up. The fact that the majority of our demographic are on facebook made it easier to see what they would like in a film.


• We also made use of the cameras. However, on one of the cameras we used we didnt know how to do the white balance, which may of made our rushes slightly yellow. We also had trouble with tripods because we didnt see if they worked before we took them away. So one of the tripods was broken which resulted in us having wonky framing.


• One technology that i didnt change from last year was IMovie. As the main editor of the film, i didnt feel confident in learning how to use final cut pro, as it would have wasted valuable editing time. Next time, i would have learnt how to use it before we started filming as it would have been a lot easier. However, i feel that as a social realist film, the gritty quality that we got from IMovie fitted in with the genre.
  
• We also used a voice recorder, which was very simple and easy to use. It worked out better than recording someones voice on a camera as you dont hear the background echo.


• Again, this year we used Garageband. We could have recorded a band but we found it easier to select a song from garageband as you can pick exactly what you want.

Advanced Portfolio Evaluation - Tahsina Rahman

{mostly focusing on the working class} Throughout the years, the issues have changed from struggles during war (in the past) to violence in London (present day).

For the audience in the 21st Century, the common issues which we are familiar with are

• crime
• family problems
• sex
• money
  

Most importantly, HOW THEY STRUGGLE AND WORK THROUGH IT.

My film used/developed/challenged the genre/style of 'Social Realism' by...

MISE EN SCENE:

• Diagetic sound - A violin piece inspired by Daldry's 'Eight'; it creates an innocent atmosphere.
  
  The voiceover was by a different person who had the characteristics in the voice, for instance, the emotion, which was also inspired from the same film. The accent also set fit.

• Costume - A list of 'sports' branded hoodies (used to stereotype the working class) for the different places the protagonist is located at.
  
  - Also his trainers were originally newly bought but covered in mud to give off the 'used' effect, and were also a sports brand.

• Make-up - The bruise around the eye (with eyeliner) symbolised the violence (linking in to crime).
  
  - It was a subtle take on what a person could suffer through in a area like such, or stuck in a situation (such as bullying) can suffer through.
  

• Location - Working class flats to show where the antagonist lives, sticking with the stereotype.
  
  - Only capturing (in what we felt) was the working class look in a middle class kitchen (in the college) and with the help of the props to make it more life like.
  
  - The college might have let down the stereotypes we tried to work along as it doesn't have a working class image due to being located in a middle class town.
  
  - The park was a risky place to shoot at as it was seen as 'common' but it suited the isolation, and ironically, the relationship between the antagonist and toy.
  
  - However, the park was realistic to the point where children/teenagers are most likely to hang around in their free time ---> aiming towards our target audience of 12-18.
  
  
• Framing/angles - Starting it off with a chase by handycam, at a long shot which showed off the back of the antagonist, to leave him unidentified which films such as 'About A Girl' managed to do to introduce the main actor.
  
  
• Lighting - We tried to leave lighting out as much as possible to stick for a more natural and gritty effect.
  
  - This leaves the audience with a more personal connection as the idea is to make them feel involved as much as possible.
  
  - You're most likely to receive that effect when the quality is neat, for instance, in a hollywood commercial film.
  

CHARACTERISATION:

• An teenager, seen as a social outcast and illustrates family issues as you watch further into the film.

• -This all contains the emotional and dramatic attributes which are commonly found upon social realist films.

• He hasn't created trouble but it seems to have caught up with him (which isn't looked back on during the film as we didn't want 'violence' to be the main focus).

THEMES AND ISSUES:

• In the monologue, troubles within the family are revealed.
• The bruise shows crime has entered his life, even if it was physical or verbal.
  
• Social problems (friendship)

STYLE/GENRE:

• Short film
• Gritty
• Colour with B/W (for flashbacks).
  

To work against the common features which work towards social realist movies was to change:

• The ending: I felt comfortable with an unpredictable and out of the norm (themes/issues wise) ending due to what Grian's 'Lou Lou Lives Here' included as well as Percival's 'About A Girl' (which was what it was largely based on without the gore) and incorporated it onto a more light-hearted tone.
  
  
• The style: The subtle hints of romance with the crush, the awkward/not in the norm friendship with the toy and the flashbacks.

The effectiveness of the film/poster/review combined..

TARGET AUDIENCE:

• 12-18
• Female

POSTER:

• The lead role is placed on the poster - the head was purposely cut off to create enigma for the character <-- to bring in the audience.

• I feel the enigma is most likely to appeal to teenagers as it raises questions as to why there is a toy in the hand, possibly being able to predict the psychological aspect.
  

• The clothes are casual indicating the class it's worked around, plus it correlates to the colloquialism found through the setting and voice of the voiceover.
  

• The tagline doesn't exactly work around the dimensions of the target audience but it links back to the enigma, as it is a subtle take on the plot of the film.

• The dull, broad image of the title is, firstly, the same from the film and plays off the mundane tone the film sets off when you receive a sense of the character's personality (at first) and the settings.

• The ratings and comments from the sources add a persuasive touch to the poster, as well as choosing sources which the audience can familiarise with and cater to teenagers with a wide range of media.

• The awards will only be an advantage to an audience member who are dedicated film fans, as the sources are prestigious, this often persuades people to go along and watch the film.

• However, the fact that the certificate is a 12, this may restrict us from the desired target audience because it often illustrates that a film with a 12 certificate won't contain footage worth watching, especially as a teenager.

• Making the film a 15 would have left out a large proportion of viewers, but would also convey some material may not suitable for children under the age of 15, which isn't the case for Anonymous.

REVIEW:

• Too much of the plot wasn't revealed as I hadn't wanted it to contain spoilers
• Fluently written
• Honest opinions based on acting, advantages/disadvantages
• The layout is as close to Little White Lies as possible
• The colour scheme suited the photo
• The photo is an actual capture from the film
• Font for the title of the film is practically similar/same as the one used in the magazine
  

Audience Feedback - (12-18 - College peers)
Displayed on facebook through private messages.

Pros:

• Dramatic
• Storyline
• Mysterious
  
• Music - brought out emotion
  
• Acting
• Continuity
  
• Match on action
  
• Camera work was 'arty' whilst remaining 'gritty'
• Angles
  
• Voice-over - delivery was decent and emotive
  
• Silence at the beginning - gripping for the audience
  
• Showed loneliness well
• Found the repetitive music to work well with the 'mundane' life
  

Cons:

• Bitty - seemed to jump from one anecdote to another
• Psychiatrist (me) - too aware of the camera and didn't like the 'wagging' of the pen
• Repetitive music
• Too zoomed in the psychiatrist's face
• Running shot - wasn't clear within the narrative
• Found the shot of Jimmy 'petting' the doll contradictory towards the monologue as it shows a more 'pet' like relationship rather then a friendship
• Several shots go on for too long
  

Could have been improved by:

• Dramatic tones to underline the really pivotal parts
• Shots in the kitchen could have been different
• Would have preferred a still shot rather then a shaky shot with 'Jimmy' running.
• Different locations
• (In psychiatrist shot) Book should have been handed sooner